No.
You've got potential, but remember, this is NewGrounds. Not TestGrounds.
People here aren't going to give short, boring poorly made flashes a good score.
You've got potential, but you're still missing a lot of stuff.
Backgrounds, uniqueness, humour and drawing skills.
You'll get better with time, but just try better next time. A lot better.
Your very right i shall improve i do time thanks for the feedback :D
Exedor is right.
This isn't Testgrounds! You can't just say "please rate my part of a thing that I haven't finished yet, and may never finish so it'll be an unfinished thing forever..." You have put us in a bind, and here's why:
This "animation" is a fragment. It's a piece of what could eventually be turned into a story, but for now, it's nothing more than a part or a bit.
There have been lots of flash parts and bits coming thru recently. Newgrounds used to not put up with this sort of thing at all. The problem is not if it's bad, but rather if it's good. When it's bad, it gets a low score and gets blammed and is forgotten and gone. Done.
If it's a 'good' piece, then people get confused and may pass it. The problem is that then we've got a fragment of a piece of a bit of a flash floating around newgrounds forever, and what's the point of that? That's not what Newgrounds is for.
Newgrounds is for FINISHED items. It's not good to have fragments floating around with people going, '...WTF is this??!?' when they find it.
Finish your projects and THEN submit them.
I know. My bad then, i'm used to submitting trailers before the work is complete to show others, what im working on. Next time, i'll submit the whole thing when it is fully complete.
...Meh.
Ehhhhh, it was kinda short.
About a minute and a half i think.
Hmmm. Quaint.
Reminded me, greatly so, of Cave Story.
I loved your story and the way you presented it! Awesome job!
MAYBE THE LOADING GRAPHIC JUST
SLIGHTLY
REMINDS YOU OF CAVE STORY!
lol, thanks a lot c:
Okay
Though you should keep both the Camera (Hopefully on a tripod) and the Table in the exact same position.
The hat itself should be kept on a pivot, but that can't be helped sometimes.
Also, this isn't 360* degress, just 20. :/
Meh
The art style and voice acting was good.
But I didn't really get the point of it all.
Oh well, you can't produce something that appeals to EVERYONE on the internet.
That's impossible.
Long Live The /B/rotherhood of the Hatred Machine
Epic Luls right there dude.
Good work.
Though, the moral promotes Furfaggotry, not such a good thing on NewGrounds.
What, with NewGrounds limitred Yiffing Pr0nz.
Still, this flash is Winsauce, Awesomesauce and pwnage worthy cexiness.
Good work.
It shall please The /B/rotherhood's Holly Inner Circle's Lulzy Members.
If you have a chance, please take this to your leader. I wish to pleasure him with it.
About the sexual preference Dad took at the end; well, it's not really fur. The Shoopacabra is a reptile, not a furry animal. Therefore, scales; no fur.
...GAHASM!
Truly. That was just awesome magical.
I tried the Half Beard thing myself awhile ago, went to the Pyramids with a group of mates. Many people thought I was "From the white-man place".
Btw, the Pyramids is like a shopping mall, but one floor, and about 3 achers(?) big.
Anyway, my comment on the cartoon. Thats all you care about, right?!?!
Unlike the majority of stuff I've watched on NG recently this is only one of two that managed to make me laugh. Congratulaions, you made an insane and inangantly tired/bored person laugh. Something not many can achieve. Because they don't care. They never care.
Anyway, Seriously...Why stop the comments on "STOP" tha was mean..
Could of atleast lead me through the entire Flash one second at a time. =><
Also. Voted 5.
Added to favourites.
Gave it a 10.
Its awesome.
I'm gonna go download Firefox just so I can save the flash to my computer. And play it.
...Alot.
Because you are awesome.
...Peacock guy is gay.
(Pea) (Cock)
He must have a lower...downstairs.
...IDEA!
Half-Pube.
...Though...That'd be itchy. And crazy.
And Wrong minded.
So by all means, DO IT!!
'KAYTHNXBAI.
(LOL, No HTML, please.)
Heh, yeah, the last page was just me running out of ideas of things to put in the scrapbook. I covered all the important stuff in there, so be happy about that. Yo. Firefox is good about that sort of thing, yes. I do it often, what with the dialups; I can't go redownloading something every time I wanna watch it. Peacock guy, well, he's not really GAY gay, he just likes feather torture too much, that's all. lol. Half pube is an idea crazy enough to work... in a nudist colony. Otherwise, the only way others would know is if I just walked up to em and said "Hey, guess what? I got half pube going on.". That wouldn't be creepy at all, no... lol. God. Anyway, that should cover it all, so thanks for the review! A longun.
I can't watch subs and flash at same time! RARGH!
...Hmm...
Would of never thought the God of Flashes was also the King of monkeys.
XD
~Live Long, Prosper and make loads of money!
Johnny_D
lolk
...Kay...
Liek omfgu r teh newbs. ph3ar my 1337 skillz.
Or I can post a good review.
You gave this entry a 5, raising its score from 1.1483 to 1.1496!
Great flash, Sure it was short, but good graphics and great idea.
...Though you should have a disclaimer warning epiletic people. Then again...why would an epileptic be on Newgrounds? Rofl. Iconfuse myselfs.
Anywho, Keep up the good work!
ok :D
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